Shakespeare’s Sonnets wk 10

After being thoroughly informed and inspired by Professor Barry Spurr I have decided to attempt my own sonnet based around Shakespeare’s 146th Sonnet. Here it goes…

Take the first line of any one of Shakespeare’s sonnets and try to construct your own sonnet using an iambic pentameter and no more than 14 lines.

Full many a glorious morning have I seen
where green is the grass, and sunshine brings
laughter and happiness it hopes
the crisp air permeates the space and time
leaving the grass with water droplets so
Upon the glorious morning, many see not the glory
stuck on autopilot, blind to nature, deaf to birds
why art thou not see what I
not hear, touch, speak, and see the glory of dawn
it hath take over them in bliss like it take over me
feel the depth of the elements and energy of their life
oh why do I let thou, this race, fill I calm serenity with anger
anger that these fools see not the magnificent morning as I
One day it shall come to them and they wil’st not be blind.
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1 Response to Shakespeare’s Sonnets wk 10

  1. Great attempt Sarah and I like the power of your language, but the rhythm is uneven and sometimes what you are trying to say gets lost. For example in:
    why art thou not see what I
    not hear, touch, speak, and see the glory of dawn
    it hath take over them
    So I think the poem is a great start, but it needs careful editing so that your core meaning is made more apparent.
    But wonderful for you to try!


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